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aww wow! thats awesome! Spring is my favorite time of year, and I think you just explained why completely

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Beautiful I love the way you described it, especially about the new growth

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aww. Thank you so much gina!

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Lovely description of spring, a very happy, calming piece.

Again, I think the meter could be improved, ask me if you want me to go on about it in detail. I wasn't sure about all your rhymes... "love" with "above" is a little overused, "with out a sound" is a slightly clichéd phrase, possibly (also, I think "without" should be one word).

I didn't much like the "seemingly so" in the 3rd line, I thought "the flowers beckon" was brilliant personification, and then you lose the literalness of this by acknowledging that it only looks like that, rather than the flowers actually being animate.

"the ground soft and birds sing" sounds a little odd, I'd prefer it if you had both the ground and birds either being described as something or doing something, the mix of adjective and verb didn't really for me when joined by the "and". Alternatively, you could put "as" instead of "and", I think that would work.

I would suggest you come back to the ending when you have time... although I like the idea of a refrain for a "dance of spring", it didn't feel finished to me. It felt like I wanted something conclusive, maybe a general comment about spring as a sort of cadence. And I think there should be a capital at the beginning of the penultimate line.

I think the first stanza is probably my favourite, but there are gorgeous lines throughout this poem. I really like the way you focused on rain rather than sun in this, it was really nice to see a fresh way of looking at the coming of spring from the usual "melting ice, plants growing" kind of way... Sorry if I'm not making much sense in any of this. Anyway, hope some of what I said is useful, keep up the good work, as usual.

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great description of spring! i personally don't really like spring, but this is different from the way i usually think of spring.

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This is where our paths must split,
For I haven't yet the wings to fly with you.
I can only hope for a day, once my wings I have received,
When the winds will cause our paths to cross once more.

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Win? lol. ok...

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Well, it's a good thing I give you a different view!

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