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The Ugly Village: Finished by =Mattiello:iconMattiello:



The graves do sing a lonesome song
of blood wanted and flesh needed.
We are to bring a sacrifice 'ere long
when the full moon shines and the bell chimes.

The demons require specific flesh
for pleasant woes and selective throes.
Young blood; pale white and black mesh
to transpose death to life, yet absent the knife.

Raised to perfection, spade and true,
nature is their beauty and love their duty.
Correlations of black to white and pale to blue,
the beautiful shall die when the wolves next cry.

Never will they be able to love.
Locked and kept hidden-or the town will be smitten.
Dark and dank the ceiling above,
they're woken at dusk to wash the musk

But, one looks upon the moon-
a silent tear upon a cheek-restless spirits for the weak.
To feel the slaughter and hear the tune
of mysteries burning and angels churning.

Simple obscurities for centuries told
and prophecies of death during a night's mystical breath.
Black and blue of the youngness old
will deliver the dead upon a coffin of lead.
©2008-2009 =Mattiello
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This is the finished version of the poem The Ugly Village

I am happy to tell you that this is basically only a prologue to the short story I will create. This poem gives you ideas as to what will be in the short story. I hope you like it.
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"will deliver the dead upon a coffin of lead."

Yum!
The finished version is great! Nice work!
I love the last stanza!!! I mean, I love the whole poem, but the last stanza is just amazing!!!

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People change so that you can learn to let go, things go wrong so that you can appriciate them when they're right, and sometimes good things fall apart so better things can fall together.
This is very awesome... I love your describtive words, the feeling behind them... for some reason this poem make me feel cold... lonely with a hint of sadness...

But, one looks upon the moon-
a silent tear upon a cheek



I LOVE THAT!! :hug:

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And your eternal slumber
Legend shall speak
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Great ending man! This is wonderful! I love horror and macabre, but this reminds me of Bram Stoker. Good job! ^_^

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lol. I'm glad you like it!

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thanks a lot. :)

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haha. I'm glad you think so. I tried to make the last one powerful.

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aye, it's supposed to do so. The fifth stanza, though, shows a storm coming, and the last show a prediction of chaos and hope. :)

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yes! thanks! I'm very happy you like it!

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