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Acrostic Haiku - New Form by =Mattiello:iconMattiello:



Sunny days,
Palpable by all,
Run amok
a
v
In the end,
Nature is dry and
Gaia is salt

I have created an extremely difficult variation of the haiku.  Yes,  some will not like it, but I assure you: this is no walk in the park.  Like the regular Haiku, this form also incorporates the 3-5-3 or the 5-7-5 syllable rule. However - to add a wonderful twist - I've blended the form of poetry known as Acrostic to the mix. In the past,  I've found that the Acrostic form of poetry is one of the most easy forms of poetry to take on, so I decided that I wanted to make it a little harder.  I think I've succeeded in that venture.

Continuing with the rules of the Acrostic Haiku, you must realize that only words that consist of 3, 6, 9, 12, etc letters can be used in this form. If you use say an 8 letter word, your last haiku/stanza will not be complete, because you'll end up with a 3-5 or a 5-7 instead of the 3-5-3 or the 5-7-5.

Now, as you continue create each stanza, you'll notice that there is a gap, or a space, in between. connecting each stanza is important for the overall effect of the poem, so let's take a look at the above poem I've created called Sunny Days.

I used the word SPRING to show the main focus of the poem. It is a 6 letter word that - because of the 3-5-3 rule - must be separated into two stanzas.  You can see that the R in spring is the last letter in the first stanza, but it also is the connecting letter (called a liason1) between itself and the I.  The I will actually start a new stanza and continue with the piece, but forgive me.  I get ahead of myself sometimes.  Focusing back on the Liason, you'll see that another word that also starts with an R and ends in an I - hence the reason it's called a liason; It is because the stanzas are connected by its own letters that I can truly say the liason weaves the stanzas even tighter than another form of poetry.  In this case, the word is Ravi( a river in India).  The a and the v are all that can be seen between the two stanzas, but I'm sure you can see that though the first stanza ends with an R and the second starts with an I, both are still also used to connect the stanzas.

The liasons continue with each new stanza created and are not used before the first and after the last stanza.

Some of you may be wondering what happens with a 3 letter word.  Wouldn't that just be a haiku?

Not when dealing with the Acrostic Haiku, it isn't.  

s
t
a
r
Single time
Under the covers
Never seen
e
b
u
l
a


As you can see, the liason is still used, even though it isn't really connecting anything visual - only thoughts. Not the best stanza, but you get the point I think.

If you have any questions, send me a note or leave a message.
©2009 =Mattiello
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Author's Comments

1 A Liason is a french term that is used to combine two french words that end and start with a vowel - hence why the term is appropriate in this context.

©2009 Joseph L.M. Sturm. I created this form, so you had better not take credit for it.

More fun with this will be coming soon. I'll make it a challenge.

Start practicing! It's hard but very rewarding!

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:iconangelofgod87:
Hah... nice job Joe, I kinda sorta understood the concept, I may try my hand at this at a later date. Very interesting concept.

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Thanks a lot. I'm glad you like it so much. :D Let me know when you do.

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I like this idea, it's nice to see twist to the normal forms of lit styles. I may give this a go, soon.

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:iconmattiello:
Thanks!

That's great - let me know when you've finished one. :D

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You're welcome.
Will do!

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This is so cool. I've always kind of found haikus boring [probably because they're so short, and I don't tend to understand them], but this brings a nice little twist to it. I don't know if I'll be able to attempt this myself, but you've definitely got me interested.

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Great! I'm glad I could spice it up for you a little bit! Let me know when you do! you might want to start practicing, because I'm making this a wonderfully huge contest/fun challenge.

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Nice method! Might try it out some time. c:
:iconchugglepuff:
How about...

Clearly this clever,
Original and complex
Poetry structure
a
t
e
n
t
l
You claim that you have
Recently formulated
Is my creation!
n
f
r
i
n
g
i
n
Grabbing it yourself,
However cunning, is rude.
Truly, I’m ashamed.

;P Sorry, I can never resist imposing copyright warnings! Very neat form, Joe, and it is tricky. I like "Gaia is salt," by the way, very nicely-worded. One question - how come the liaison before and after is only used for single stanza haiku? It just seems odd to need more liaisons for a one-stanza Haikrostic than a two-stanza one. :shrug: Oh, and is there any limit to the length of the liaisons?

Looking forward to the upcoming fun! (Are you thinking of running another contest?)

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Complicated. Interesting. Wow!

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